Dolby

Generally well-paced and the editing makes the meaning of the narrative clear.
The areas to work on would be making sure you make the panning shots steady and look at the lighting outside. work on areas we discussed in class.

Evaluation Notes

Evaluation ideas

Here are some ideas we had regarding our evaluation...
*Prezi
*Film peoples reactions
*Voice over explaining elements
*Interviews
*Directly compare (split screen) to our preliminary task

More RMAs

In today's lesson we went back and looked at some more RMA's. We did this in preparation for when we have a little extra time to improve. They helped us see what codes and conventions we included and ones maybe we can work on in the future. We watched ones such as Hidden which were useful.

Behind the Scenes

These are some pictures from the second video shoot we did.

Final Piece

This is our final piece. We ran into many technical difficulties but managed to create the piece we had hoped for. 

Deadline approaching...

With our deadline approaching, we have made a plan of what we are yet to complete and when we will complete them. This ensures we are organised and have everything covered.
-Wednesday: Plan Freddie's monologue
                      Record dialogue with Tom
                      Get signed permission from actors
-Thursday: Plan each scene/shot/timings etc
                  Look back at RMAs for inspiration (Hidden)
                  Get audience feedback on our new storyline and opening sequence
-Friday: Continue planning shots
             Start sorting our sequence (credits, industry shot etc)
Monday: Film
Tuesday: Edit
               Get feedback from teachers and other class members
Wednesday: Make any improvements
                    Submit

Freddie's Monologue-Draft

7.02am

My name is Freddie Sharp and I have a lot of secrets, I guess that's what makes me (pause) me. 

This is my girlfriend Jade. I ask myself every day why she chose me. Everything I do is for her, to protect her. It's not wrong, its love. 

This is where I live. Its a small village, nothing used to happen here, people used to feel safe and secure-but everything has changed. 

Those who are afraid don't need to be. But those who don't fear the worst are the ones are the ones that have the most to lose. That's my theory you see. 

My most important moral? Being faithful. Something I learnt from a very young age. 

My dad made me the man I am today. Watching him abandon my mum, leaving her crippled with heartbreak, I swore I would never let that happen again, to anyone that I love. 

He's the real monster, not me. 

Night shift, that's where she thinks I've been. Working hard to provide for my family. 

I do what I have to to protect her, and no one will get in my way. 

8.02am

Until tonight, I'm Freddie again, the one she loves, the one she thinks she knows. 

Feedback from FaceBook

This is the feedback we got from people when we posted our rough cut onto Facebook. The feedback was very helpful and we are taking it all into consideration as we are planning our final cut.

June to Jade

We've had to make some changes to our piece and specifically our characters. In our initial draft, some of the feedback we received regarded the confusion around June, the fact that she was played by a much younger person. So we've discussed possible alternatives and come to one we are both quite happy with. Instead we will use Felicity (our female actor) as Freddie's girlfriend, Jade. This ensures there is no confusion. We will have to alter our storyline and instead we will have Freddie coming back from committing a murder, attempting to fool his unsuspecting girlfriend that he has been on a night shift at work. We have decided to do a voiceover over the whole thing, this will make it more intense.

Mrs D

Well done for hitting your deadline. This is a good first draft. I agree with all your points that you need to consider. In particular lighting and some framing of some shots needs thinking about. I like your titles. However, they are a bit repetitive. Go back to RMAs to help you improve this. Is genre obvious? Look back to your RMAs to help with this.

Technical Difficulties!

When we came to the lesson today, we found that a few of our clips had been lost. Michelle then sorted that out for us and located them and we managed to put them into our sequence. This is the updated version of our rough cut.

Tied-Rough Cut

This is a rough version of our opening sequence for our movie 'Tied.' We ran into a few problems and have made a list of area's we need to work on just from watching the clips back through.
-Our movie is quite a lot shorter than we had hoped because we weren't able to use some of our clips. This was down to it being confusing for the audience and our main priority was to ensure our audience wasn't unsure by keeping it simple.
-We found the lighting and framing on some of our shots didn't look particularly professional and we are keen to go back and improve on these.
-The beginning is a bit jolty between our company title and the beginning of the film. We couldn't seem to make this smoother whatever we tried so when we will improve we will extend the clips and audio so it will be more smooth.
-Some of our shots are quite short and we think extending them may set the scene and ass some tension.
-The ratio of June screen time and Freddie screen time isn't evenly spread and we wanted it to be, so we will need to go back and add some scenes in which even the time out. This will mean we get a better idea of what Freddie is doing and it will give a bit more away about the characters because at the moment we feel its difficult to know much about them.
 We will post it on facebook and other social media accounts so we can get more feedback. This is also particularly useful because offering it to people are age means we are getting feedback from our target audience.
In addition to this we will show our actors the sequence and get their feedback because having been heavily involved in the process they will be good to get feedback from as they may be able to envision things we can do to benefit the scene.
From all the feedback we receive we will re shoot and make all the necessary adjustments.

Behind the scenes of our video shoot

Here are some images from the video shoot we did with our actors. We only have a few photos because we opted to make a few behind the scenes videos instead. This would create buzz about our film as audiences could experience the process of the making of our film as well as establishing friendly relationships with our cast and crew.